Hmmm...This didn't quite 'click' for me. It was like I was reading a poem, but I didn't understand all of it. I mean...It was ok. But...I dunno. It was off somewhere. Like it was missing something.

The flow was not too bad. The rhymes were cliche though. If you hadn't made them so cliche, it probably would've made it a little more improved. It was sweet that you were thinking of your friends, it's just...it didn't fit for me. 4/5 xoxo

Samantha