The Kind of Music You Cry To

Great poem! I like it! uhm but you need few changes here :)

If you would just open up to a bit of spontaneity
Dare to convince me that we�re not just stuck
You would see that were always so close to me

Tomorrow it will all be old news to you
But it�ll be all silence and serenity
Just like the kind of memories you die to.

There you just need to edit:

we�re - We're
it�ll - It'll

I liked this poem you did a good job to me I'd just work on the rhythm it will sound a whole lot better

I like this poem alot. you did a great job.
5/5

~Chelsea

This was rather unique, I like the whole "...die to, cry to... etc" thing you got going on here.

"Lie, swear you will keep in touch
I need to hear I was perfect sometimes
Not always just never enough"

^ I like how "lie" is isolation here by a comma. It highlights it, as if you really want the readers to focus on that.

"If you would just open up to a bit of spontaneity
Dare to convince me that we�re not just stuck
You would see that were always so close to me"

^ I'm not sure if it's just me, but I didn't understand the last line here...? =S

Anyhow, nicely penned nonetheless.

Wow, great talent. so real and yet so painfuly sad.