Very nicely done! I don't know why this has been rated one for. =/ Tehe. Anywho, I love this style now, and you've done a really good job on it. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Hmmm this poem makes me think deep..
Ive nver tried this kind of poetry, and I think youve done a great job

Definitely a 5

God Bless

Awe...Wow... I love it! This is amazing... So...different.. So... alive?... I don't know.. but god I love it. Great job! ((Sorry to say, you got downrated again...Nothing worse than a 5.0 poem!!))

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

A unique piece....very different. i like that you try diff styles of poetry, you seem to do good at them all!
Charisma*