So Tell Me

by Raychil   Sep 10, 2006


So tell me,
What's become of us?
Complaining about how hard our life is
And using that to call our actions just

So tell me,
Why has society gone down hill?
When people can do as they please
Until they get their fill

So tell me,
Why is our propriety war?
When people everywhere are starving
And they are still always ignored

So tell me,
ow are we all so blind?
We hurt people all around us
Until we leave them with no hope to find

So won't you tell me,
What has become of us?
Our father's once great creation
Has disappeared into the dust.

*We were talking about how the world has changed in my history class, so I wrote this, tell me how to edit it, I think it could've come out better.

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  • 18 years ago

    by amandaa

    Honestly, I think it's really really good....I think like this too, and have asked these questions before as well...
    That's pretty darn cool.
    But yeah, I think it's good.
    really good.
    *butterfly

  • 18 years ago

    by Esther

    I like it at the mo but if you want ways to improve you could get rid of the so at the beggining of the so tell me's! and on the 'Until they get their fill' you could put Taking more than their fill instead or some-thing like that! I'd love to tell you how to improve it more but best not for fear of hurting your feelings!

  • 18 years ago

    by Esther

    I like it at the mo but if you want ways to improve you could get rid of the so at the beggining of the so tell me's! and on the 'Until they get their fill' you could put Taking more than their fill instead or some-thing like that! I'd love to tell you how to improve it more but best not for fear of hurting your feelings!

  • 18 years ago

    by Todd

    So true!:P

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