Very emotional. i like how you expressed how much you miss your brother by reflecting on all of the things you miss about him. i'm sorry for your loss. take care. and good job!

Hey that is great and thanks for looking at my poem anyway i have a new one up if you want to look at it is called watching time pass me oh and by the way great poem!!!! Very sad!

This poem is so sad, honestly written and very touching. It is full with emotions.
I am sorry for your loss.

This poem is very sad. You expressed emotions excellently and created excellent, touching atmosphere. You really wrote this piece superbly.
Well done! 5/5

Aww this is very sad and touching... hun im so sorry for your loss...but keep your head held high. *Hugs*

as for the poem, it flowed good but i suggest maybe you revise this..read over it again.. there was alot of minor mistakes in here.

but overall this is still pretty good.5/5

Cohesive and coherent poem which really touched my heart. Feel happy for God will bless him. And your love is in this poem. Very sincere :)

Hi, i realy loved your poem and how you have expressed your feelings for your borhter. it was such a nice experience to read this type of poem there are many talented writers inthis website. and you are one of them..
5/5

Wow this poem made me want to cry, it is very sweet and heartfelt, the words and emotion portrayed in this poem is really good
well done
xx

I'm very sorry to hear about the loss of your brother. Perhaps they can see the words we write somehow. Your poem is fantastic, and I am looking forward to reading more from you! ~Tara

WOW.
This emotion, of missing someone, is one I am sure many can relate too. Personally you spoke from the heart which made the poem quite effective. Well done *5/5*

Excellent poem. Beautifully written. This is very heartfelt and touched the hearts of all your readers. I know this poem was written a year ago but I hope you're doing fine.

5/5

-Shannon <3

The truth feelings. i realy enjoyed it... it made me a sad bit.. its nice poem. you have tealnent. i will give you 5

Very deep

i can feel your pain in this poem but this is the life..we all will die one day

Again I'm so sorry for your lose..

Another amazing poem. I really liked how you described the things you guys did together. Its really a sad poem.. You did a great job and putting your thoughts into words.

Excellent

5/5

Awwz very good but sad....is this rele bout ur brother and if it is that is rele sad! :'-(

Some people think poetry is the physical form of emotion, however this poem (although on a very emotional topic) seems to lack a sense of concern.

The structure of the poem is very weak. It seems as though the author (you) copy/pasted feeling words into a prewritten backbone of a poem. There is minimal flow from beginning to end, instead it fluctuates from areas of different strengths and weaknesses,

Also, there are a few minor spelling/grammar errors.

But all in all I hope you know that I mean no negativity by this comment. Poetry is a difficult subject to critique because it is not mine to criticize. I hope you realize that I don't know you, so I have no reason to criticize your poem just for kicks. The only reason I don't give 100% positive feedback is because I feel you can in turn edit it to make it even better.

{4/5}

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Really good. it made me cry. im so sorry. its so sad that someone so young was taken from your family.
Taegan Emily xx

Really good. it made me cry. im so sorry. its so sad that someone so young was taken from your family.
Taegan Emily xx

Really good. it made me cry. im so sorry. its so sad that someone so young was taken from your family.
Taegan Emily xx

Wow, I'm really sorry about your brother.
I can feel the emotion in this piece, it was touching and I loved it :)
Again, a bit repetitive. But I like how you put brother in brackets.
It's very good, and if you choose (and if you can sing) it might turn into a lovely song... ;)