Its a very good poem with a very stong message. You conveyed it very well!! Great work!!

Jon

I didn't understand most of the poem, until the end, but it captured me and put me in that state, like if you're high, except without the drugs. I'm hyper right now, and what I'm trying to say is, I really liked the poem, the flow is good, and you have a nice amount of adjectives, to make the scene enjoyable. Keep up the good work.

You know me I'm a sucker for good symblosim and this was great I liked it