While Haiku's are hard for me to judge, I read your poem twice to see if it was just as it appeared to be on the surface of if there was another deeper meaning to the poem. I'm not a fan of the word Or to start off a sentence but you appeared to pull it off well even starting the last line with So. It had nice imagery to it with the sparkling diamonds and the truth on some levels of your first sentence. |
Eh, not your best, I'll be honest, but in these few lines you said quite a lot. I liked the imagery and the explination for the rubies. Nicely done. |
by Goran Rahim
This is very nicely written, i really enjoyed reading it, 5/5 for you |
by LadyPearl
Beautiful job, great descriptions! |
by Misstress
Whew...Perfect... |
by awww
Wonderful.. im not fond of haikus but this i actually liked this one.. haha keep up the good work! even if there were only 3 lines.. there was so much imagery.. great job! |
Hey, really short and i cant really find any hidden messsage, but i like, it not to complex so it doesnt make me think to hard. lol |
Nicely done!!! |
by N J Thornton
Enticing haiku. I love the form because it allows you to create wonderful images and concepts in so few words/lines. This was a beautiful write, and quite enjoyable. Oh and thanks for the comment on my "manager" poem, I'm glad you liked it sweetie. |
by shobhana kumar
Just like you to say so much in such few words. I can never tell you how much I admire your work. |