I like the way you express your true feelings seemingly honestly straight from the heart

This is a sweet poem...a nice new topic...good raw emotion in this poem and a nice way with your words....

I really like it marcus.

Hey. that was good.... keep writing.

2 words..So sweet...I love it.

X3Grace

Pretty good job. Nice descriptions and feelings.

Your rhyme scheme changed in this poem. Also some of the rhymes didn't seem to work, they sounded forced. It would also help if you capitalized first letters in each line.

Awwwhh, that was soo sweeet! I loved it.. The descriptions were just beautiful.. The flow worked well.. The love was great.. And I just loved it! Keep up the great work! 5/5

I loved your poem ao much and i swear i'm experiencing this right now and it's kindda hard...what is written in here are like meant for me!!!WOW AWESOME keep it up

Hey
i really love this poem its really good
i can really relate to it

Why must we be just friends and nothing more
our feelings for each other are so strong
that is something you know is true and can't ignore
if we was to give us a try it would last so long

is my favourite part

keep up the good work
ily.xox

Awwww.... man that poem was BOMB..
that was exillent..
i really liked reading it..
so plz read and commit one of mine as ive done for you..

Wow, this is excellent! keep it up!

It's hard to write a comment when there are already so many and they all say everything lol. I definately agree with them all though. Its a really really good poem. I can definetely feel the emotions you are putting across. Very awesome poem. Keep it up. =]

Very good....

It was good, but i think it rhymed a little too much for my taste. it kind of got annoying after hearing the same rhyming pattern.

This part i loved alot:

"When you are around it is heated like fire"

Great poem 5/5

Awww i really like this.....its touching.....*tear,tear* lol JK but im serious its really good

I like it and, it's a really good poem....GJ

This was a really great awesome poem w/o a doubt! And the rhyming sheme was cool! It flowed very smooth. you are very talented indeed. and you should just tell that girl how u feel and show her this poem im sure she will feel extra special!

When you are around it is heated like fire
((I do not like this line...Reword it.))
that is the way you inspire
me to write this as a way to inquire
((Poor ...word choice? Yes, I think that is it.))

* You broke the AAAA rhyme scheme into a ABAB rhyme scheme in the middle of the poem! Don't do that! It just shows you do not have enough vocabulary to support your words...And if you mean to do that... It really wrecked the poem.

if we was to give us a try it would last so long
((If you were to give us a try... {Grammar mistake}))
The girl I always see in my fantasy
if I don't get you I might lose my sanity
((Sounds forced... Like you did not know what else to say, or did not have another word to rhyme with...))
I feel like you have given me no chance
to show you the true definition of romance
nothing I could do to enhance;
you because me and you are a perfect match
and just so attached
can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you

Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
((Why did you break format? Of the four lines? Bad!!!! And the rhyming is all over the place...Why? That makes no sense!))
I feel like you have given me no chance
to show you the true definition of romance
((Nicely done.. I like these lines.))
can't let go or break loose even if I wanted to
why are you always fronting when you know I've always wanted you
(( Ok, rapper... 'Fronting' is NOT a word you use in a love poem, tiger. Try a different word.))

Even though we got a good bond that can't be broken
I want to be more than friends and will always be hoping!
((Even though we *have* a good bond that can't be broken..))
((Broken and hoping doesn't rhyme very well.. they do not flow well together. And the last sentence does NOT make sense...To me..))

Hope that helps... Tell me if you revise it and I will come back to critize!
xDarkSuicidex