The bell tolled midnight as the blade slashed her torn heart -
((Amazing lines...))
Silently chanting his long awaited good-bye.
The lost lullabies, slipping from beyond his lips,
((So wonderfully written! Absolutely beautiful.))

This is absolutely amazing...It is so beautifully written! I adore it... I loved the story behind it, as well. Very dark and malicious...You seem to love the topic of one guy killing one girl. Good topic, eh? Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I love the phrase "pirate stars..." i want to know what made you think of that. this is an interesting poem - it describes something violent, but in delicate language. that's a nice juxtaposition of content and style