One amazing poem, i think its perfect and so sweet in a sense. Keep up the good work mate!

This is a good poem also, but i will give you4/5 but i still LOVED IT never mind i changed my mind, i am gonna give ya 5/5 hehe, cuz it is a masterpiece...hehehehe

Hey i really like the way that you write ur poetry. theres lots of agghh..mm..darkness, babe.
~sarah~

I love the ending line you used...I thought that it added to the effect of the poem and it was very intense...
Flow is good throughout and both word choice and rhyme scheme are enjoyable...once again, beautiful work.