by Phantasmagoria Sep 14, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
A torrent breaks in |
by druane
I really like it its awsome, its like alive or something i love it |
by Leslie
This is good, i can feel the power in your words, they're well chosen. My only thing is no punctuation and/or spacing. ahh, i dont want to critique because in my heart i really feel this poem. I just think the physical apperence of the poem could be made stronger. your words need spacing and work to back them up and make them real |