That is an excellent poem! I don't agree with all of it though. Not many people are married by 20 and not all people have children at that age. Plus you make it sound like life is miserable when (I may be wrong) I think it would be exciting to start out on my own and earn a living.

Just sharing a thought, thanks for the advise anyway, Sarah

Good message and i will try to aplly it to my life. good flow with your words and rhymes.

"don't try so hard to have a bad day"

I really liked that. It rung true.
It's beautiful advice.
Thank you.

//T.L.//

True and Helpful message! I will try my best to take your well-meant advice! Wonderful flow and word choice! 5/5

could you check out my poems?
thx

xxEvilAngelxx

Wow! This poem is so powerful and inspirational. You are an amazing poet with so much wisdom...especially for young ones, but really for everyone living life day by day (so really us all). I'd would greatly appreciate you commenting on my poems...I would be honored. Thank you! :)
~Midnight Sun

I really liked this poem, true talent!