Its really good.. but i tihnk that the rhyming has taken over the poem and in some places its seems like the word has only been used so it will ryhme, and not for the meaning.
but i think its a really good poem to build more on.. so keep up the excellent work!! x

Thanx for the comment but i was trying to put it like different things like icing to cake and clothes to silk..just stuff like that- sorta like that...anyway thanx for the comment

Beautiful well writen