Nice choice of words combined with an interesting story.
This was a good read.

God Bless!

Ok this was a vrey interesting poem. it was sad, but not an 'emo' omg life sucks poem. (no offense to those poems.. lol)

The language was amazing and the flow worked pretty well, although rough a lil in a few spots(no biggy) the actual story in the poem was beautiful and tragic, and the poem was written very well. this was a very good poem. i enjoyed reading it a very lot.

5|5

xxLauren