Exlcellent poem for a first go Dave. Great work

Hey thats a good poem, i cant wait till u get to ya 4 months, lolu remind me so much of me n jayden, n how i cant live with out him, when we broke up i couldnt look at another guy, n i still cant, i think he is the hottest guy to me, love is so funny love is AMAZING

... well done

Shes lucky 2 have u and it shows so much that you care 4 her alot

Great poem man...masiy is a lucky girl. Keep this up man, I gave you a 5.
I liked it

I like your poems david, one thing though, dont use slabg like u, in poems, but this is a very good poem man, i give it a 5/5!!!! keep it up!!!!

That's so sweet! i totally give that a 5. thanks for telling me to edit my last poem...lol..i dont know why it does that sometimes. weird...but yea thanks! niiiiiiiiiiice poem yet again!

I think you put so much emotion into a rhyming poem which is difficult because of rhyming restrictions but you managed it very well and the poem itself definitely had a certain style which was enjoyable. 5/5 Thank you btw for commenting my poems

My favourite of your's so far...beautifully written...well expressed, heaps of emotion.
I loved the imagery and wording.
Excellent work.

Nice flow in this beautiful dedication to the one you love. Simple but very sweet. Good job!

Really a good poem... i would've liked to see a little more to it, a few different words than what you had, more complicated and unique... it was a good poem, but it felt generic, my thing is to try and stand out, i look for poems that do that... but it was still good so i gave you 5/5 nice

That's such a sweet poem, this girl is very lucky to have you.
I see since when you wrote this you have improved so much, but this is great for your first poem, my first one sucked. =P Keep them coming. =] 5/5

Tammie

Amazing. Awesome job! I loved it, it was so sweet and this girl is lucky to have you. buh-bye now!
Burning~Wings

This poem, this is love, its all here, including the fear of losing that wich you love the most, it cant be better, because we cant define love only the hert can so i give 5/5 is wish i could give more for this poem deserves it :)))

This is a really really great poem!! i love it...good job!! 5/5...

thanx 4 commenting my poems.

Aww this poem is so touching. i loved it. This Maisy girl should be lucky that she has such an awesome guy who writes her poetry [: 5/5

Very lovely poem! I love how you wrote this! The flow was great! Please keep writing!
Thanks =)

I love it. It's so touching, you heard that before, but it's true. right from the heart. You write it beautiful.
Keep going
Hebe

Not bad. Good read. ;)

Aw this is a really nice poem. Flows really well and I enjoyed reading it. 5/5

marcella