Beautiful poem, i feel you in this poem, dad sometimes is always to busy too.

I totally understand the poem. It has a great concept, but it's lacking emotion and feeling. You need to dig deep. I have a few suggestions and I hope that they do not upset you.

1) You should be more descriptive on why you miss him so much.

2) I noticed in the last stanza that you wrote:What if you can't see us?
You should explain somewhere before the last stanza who is the us.

But please don't get discourage because a lot of times when I write I make the same mistakes or worse mistakes. But the thing that I like about those mistakes is when I get comments and people tell the truth . This would be a excellent poem if you look into fixing those few mistakes. It has a good concept, and a nice flow. I give you a 4/5. Keep working at it . I will be checking back with you to see how your coming along.

Best wishes
Letty

Hmm ... Try to make it longer to explain more about the emotions that yur feeling . It`ll make the poem much better . But it has a nicee thing about it .
I digg what this poem is saying .
Altho the last stanza kinda left me hanging.
But nice job otherwise .
..ღ__MiNDYY

I like that. It's short, but very nice. I like how you only mention that it's too your dad at the end too.

I appreciate this......makes me 'hope' you gave it to him.........