by Goran Rahim
That is a great poem, 5/5 |
by Truest Lies
"So take the knife push it deep look at my face the pain runs deep." Maybe another words instead of deep twice, but it still put its steel-cold, mesmerizing point across. |
by Audrey
I didnt like the opening line, but the rest was decent, with a few lines that showed your true potential. Im being harsher on your poem than alot that ive read, because I think you could do better. |
by Taylor Lyn
I like this poem, but maybe you could break up the paragraphs into lines? I think that it may have more impact to the reader if it were presented that way. Nonetheless, I like it a lot. |
by Darien
"For seen" is actually spelled "foreseen" |
You're very creative with your writing, I like it. The emotion and heart were amazing. Nice work, truly. |
by Goth
Very emotional !!! ) nice job!5/5 |
I like it alot, it shows passion and emotion. but i hope this isnt how you actually feel in real life because alot of your poems are like it. if its just poems then i understand. but in real life no person deserves to live that way. no matter what they have done or what was done to them. |
This is probably one of the deepest poems i have ever read. The emotion spills out of it and the pain in the poem just pours out like a waterfall |