This poem is very good!

Depressing poem Noir! lol Still good job none the less! :]

This poem is really good
simple... in a good way.
keep t up.
<3 jess
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Love the way all the comments on your stuff are merely, good job. over your stuff. Glad no one could say anything that truly made an impression upon your poetry, whether criticizing or praising, just mere empty exaltation. Hopefully I am not the same.

Your poem wasn't bad. Better than most I read on here, or off here for that matter. It reminds me of John Donne, the father of metaphysical wit. If you aren't familiar with him you should read him; he isn't bad. Real good at what he does though. Although I liked the poem just like it was, I wouldn't have minded a few more lines in the middle to flush out a few more ideas that could be inferred like the journey is more to be desired than the destination. Maybe a little more in the psycho analysis area of why, or what, or maybe how. Overall you do a good job of making the reader truly get into the poem a little more than most. A little investigation never hurt anyone. I just think by adding a tad here or there you could give the reader more to get in on. But that is my opinion.. It truly is good like this. Religious, spiritual, after life, metaphysical, thoughtful, philosophical--all nice touches.

Wow....

I really like this like alot "I tried many things to quench my thirsty life." i really like this part you should check out my poems and comment you might like them

Wow.. that explains a lot!
you seem like a great writer!