Aside from a few things such as complain should be complaint etc, I thought it was a pretty okay poem. It got it's point across though I wish you would have put more emotion into this. Remember show don't tell. |
I thought this poem was alot better than the first part because in this poem it describes the debunking perception that the other poem unfurtunatly lacked...it is a very powerful, strong and emotional poem...i loved it..but there is so many unanswered question i have to this poem........ |
I ment to say emotion and passion rather than perception..which doesn't make any sense..sorry about that.. |
by Goran Rahim
Thank you farah, for liking it, and I kind of know what are your questions, there is a big story behind this poem, so i can not write it here. |
by shela
Wow, I dont have enough words to tell you how great is this poem, but in my mind you created many unanswered questions. I like this better than origional one. 5/5 |
by Nelle
Holy crap. I loved this poem. it was so different then any other love poems i have read recently. well actually. ever. it was absolutely amazing. i enjoyed reading every word of it! great great job |
by blueknight
Is she already read this!.. Wow dude a super ultra sad and sweet poem for her , Hope she will read this and the words you use was penetrate my heart it passes through my veins lols and yeah it is absulutely 5/5 |
by Goran Rahim
You mean if HE read it??? |
by Taylor Lyn
Excellent work, I really enjoyed it...now I'm gonna go read part one! hehe...Keep up the good work, looking forward to reading more of your poems!!! |
by desigirl
As the feelings i feel in this poem, I can see this poem as another hit poem in this site. |
by Megann Lee
Omg Goran this is absolutely amazing! I think this is very powerful and great. It was nicely written and the flow was outstanding. |
Sweet and lovely penn, great job!!! |
by Misstress
A very good sequel.truly. |
by Goth
Very sad!! Alot of heart break in this poem, and felt every second of it. |
by freshta
Hmm, it is me again, just like you said your freshta,lol. |
by bOlly danCer
WAT A BEAUTIFUL sequel 5/5....goran aap jaysa koi nahi yaar...i loved it...aacha hai..:) i feel wat u have writtin in my heart too.. its a wonderful poem...:) it must mean alot to you..but it means more to me coz it was writtin by YOU..... :) :) :) |
by Sweet lig
How so sweet.... very sweet poem! well this is the part two, so i am now interested to read the part one hehe.. well job well done keep it up5/5 |
by BlueDreams
Oh my....goran, what a beautiful penned you potray here...so breathtaking written...yet flowed with beautiufl emotions! |
by Jenni Marie
Again, i really liked this one too. |
by Marcus
Very nicely done.......most I would say was already mentioned before |