Awww thatz cute

5/5 yo poem wat 2 raw, i hope u keep on writing cuz u are really good and dont let nobody tell u any different! newayz can u look at my poemz and tell me wat u think? ok, thatz all i gotta say im out!
much love from
Peachez aka Babi-Gurl bka Mrz.Mitchell

Very nice write, only critique I really have is not to use so many personal descriptions such as (I, my, me, you, etc.) while it describes something on a personal basis, it also floods the poetic-ness out of your write, just an observation. Other than that well written, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe