Beautiful imaginary..
Keep on writing on what u feel and like.

God Bless!

Wow.. Imagery in this was amazing.. The flow was pretty good although it had a few awkward bits.. But the imagery was really great, I could picture everything you described.. Wow, nicely done sweetie! 5/5

I thought it had wonderful descriptions and the feeling was there, but honestly I was a bit distracted by all the 'ands' at the beginning of the sentences. Actually, the whole poem seemed to be one looong sentence and I didn't really know what was going on. Maybe you could edit it a little bit, like take out some of the words that don't really need to be there and break it down into proper sentences. I'm not going to re-write the whole poem for you to make an example, because I hate it when people do that to me; it's your poem, but hopefully you know what I mean. I think this could be a really great poem :)

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah Joy

Awe that was so gosh darn cute hun. I loved it. 5/5 =]]

-Jenna.

Lovely.

A Poem you should be justly proud of. Descriptive flowing a breath of fresh air, and and, no that's it, well done!