by Melissa Sep 22, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
There you stand against the wall by your self in everyones shadow |
by Mommy And Me
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This would read so much better if you wrote it more poetry like. If you know what I mean. Right now it reads too much like a story, and not a poem. Again, there were mistakes. Take care over your work and re-check it before you post it. It would be really great if it didn't have as many mistakes. |
Nice work, 5/5 |