Nice work, 5/5

*check some of mine out sometime*

This would read so much better if you wrote it more poetry like. If you know what I mean. Right now it reads too much like a story, and not a poem. Again, there were mistakes. Take care over your work and re-check it before you post it. It would be really great if it didn't have as many mistakes.

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how lonely you must fill but at least you
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should that be feel instead of fill???

but other then that it is awsome. i love it. cuteness.