You have a brilliant way with words. I couldn't think of anything to improve, but then again I never saw anything wrong, but then again I'm not very good at dark poems.. but then again.. hehe I could go on all day with 'then agains'.. but anyways. Very good poem. I love the metaphorical death part. Keep it up!

Love Sarah-Joy

A couple of things:
1. is it supposed to be "hearts?"
2. i really like the first three lines of the last stanza, but the last one seems more like you were trying to think of something to say. i think the last line should be really effective, and leave the reader going "whoa." (easier said than done, i know.)

but seriously:"the concrete angel cries from all your sins coated in deciet.." how cool is taht?

I loved the word choices for this one.. I also loved how you made it seem very dark but kept my attention the whole way. You didnt go overboard and brough just enough darkness to keep me interested. Way to go, I love it

This was dark and deep loved it 5.5