I like it a lot!

Not bad for a rhyme scheme. but your grammar is off. hope that helps! Jpoet*

Heey!
fijn om eens iemand tegen te komen die ook nederlands spreekt;) bedankt voor je comment!
I really like this poem, and I think the Ottava Rima was right. :) There's a centre of truth in your poem. It made me think. :)
Keep up the good work!

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Really nice poem, I like the message!
Thank you for the comment on "Eternal slumber" it's much appreciated ^^
Take care and keep writing!