I think it was a good first poem, but that the thoughts you used have been "done before" so try using the same thoughts, but do it using different words. hope this helps you! you're off to a great start as a poet! Jpoet*

This is one of my favorite poems i have read. You are very good at exspressing ur emostions.

Hey gurly thanx for the coment i really think this poem is good post more poems up in here gurly!!!

God gurly that's wat i call a good poem especially for ur young age...well im only 15 but still...well keep doin wat u doin!!!

Hey, yours is good too! =D