They say you live but in my eyes you are dead
never going to be rived
i guess this is my final
goodbye

this is your best lines of the poem, great!

Very good. Nice to see someone using this style. Keep it up! And thank you for all your comments on my work.

This poem was very good!!! omg i can't say i know how you feel but my mom does sometimes act like im not there. i feel so bad!! BE HAPPY FOR YOUR LIFE IS WORTH TEN OF OTHER PEOPLE'S BECAUSE YOU ARE A GOOD WRITER!!!

Wow so deep i feel your pain keep writting its the only thing we can control

This is a very good and emotional poem! You really poured your heart into it. Very relatable also. I kow what it's like to have a mother not care and try to commit suicide and then try to act like everything is fine. Keep your head up. Don't live her life.
Love ((Beautifully Forgotten))

Wow, Amazing poem. I can't believe I past by it before. Very good, full of strong emotions and very powerful writing. Interesting style, breaking in and out of acrostic and free form, you did it well. Its sad to hear you say that about your mom, I hope you are closer with her now. Keep up the good work and don't let writers block stop you from writing all together, you have an amazing talent and it would be a shame to see it put to waste.

XOXOXOXOX
I Love You,
Chris