Absolutely beautiful poem you penned here, simply but flowed with beautiful done, i'll enjoyed my visit, 5/5

bert ~

This is awesome, perfect flow and beautiful wording... I love the message, it's really nice to read something that's full of meaning and honesty.

"Pocket books of the corporate criminal
Hidden messages of greed are subliminal"
^^^ Nice wording here! A really excellent piece of poetry here, Darien!

Now here's the Darien I love. Lol, as always there's not much I can say about this but WoW. Very original job in using doves to explain the message. Keep it up

*by the way, one of my new poem has you in it.

So sad and so damn true! You've captured so amny of the truths about today and placed them so brilliantly into poetry that one can not just turn away from it. I loved the dove symbology and the entire poem resonated with wisdom and betrayal. Ana amazing write my friend, you are extremely talented!

The flow and truth within this poem just makes you want to read it over and over again .
You have poured your heart and soul into this piece Darien .
And in that you have brought new hope to many just by giving us a look into reality . And by spreading your words of truth maybe the world will sit up and listen with an open ear .

"One caring heart, makes love multiply"

This poem made think. sadly this discribes the world perfectly. my favorit is the 4 vers 'cause i face it every sec of my life. the ending is gr8. good job:)

Your description is spot on... What a sad state of affairs!! If only things were just simple. Great write, rhymes were exquisite and the flow was out of this world.

This is awesome! A snapshot of what life has become for many. Beautifully done.

Beautiful poem. I read it over three times because I loved it so much. It captured the true sense of reality with utmost sorrow. Your words are extremely deep and heartfelt. The poem is totally subjective and I couldn't agree more with your description of what life has become. Keep up your perfect work! 5/5

Oh my goodness!! Darien!! I can't believe I missed this poem! Gah!! I'm so stupid. ;P

This was REALLY good. I loved the message in this. Your flow and rhyming were flawless as per usual.. but the message was the greatest part about the poem. Very nicely done muh SMAWCE brother. ;P Keep it up!

Natalie``

This is one of the best poems that I have ever read on this site, definitely one of my favorites. Such a great use of words and flow, definitely an amazing job. Great work, no less than a 5/5 from me! :)

Whoaaa.. Darien, that was amazing. I'm sitting her all dumb founded. Haha. I can't think of anything to say except it is an amazing piece of work.

AND P.S Lmao, thanks for your comment. It made me laugh for some odd reason, and I needed a laugh today. So thank you. ^^

Wow, I really liked it

The world we live will soon fall into pieces
As teenage suicide look for quick releases
Empty feelings of heartbreak and lust
Corruption turns governments into dust that stanza expecially but it on the whole was great

WOW. I liked it. 5/5

Excellent poem

Very sad, powerful, inspirational and completely true. I see a lot of that already.
"Lost connection with your best friends
Conforming to the latest fashion trends"

--Wonderful, truthful lines

So true, so true. This is really how the world is today, and I'm so glad that you've made it into a wonderful poem to read. The rhymes were amazing, and original, and the flow was well done. I liked this piece a LOT! It was about the world and the way people live every single day. Very well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

OMG! this was wonderful!
the words, the flow,,,
i loved it...

Fantastic write! Keep it up! My only suggestion is in the last line:

As doves die and our hopes fade away

I would have it say:

As doves die and our HOPE FADES away

Other than that, AMAZING! =D 5/5

Hi, I really loved your poem. I liked it so much that i decided to use it for an English assingment i hope thats ok :) its nothing bad i just had to analyze it. i took me awhile i but i got it ;) i have to present it in front of my class i really hope they like it :)