Quiet Ocean

by LockedInEternity   Sep 25, 2006


Quiet was the ocean,
So calm, silent and still.
A young girl set out sailing,
To go and test her will.

Pain indulging screams and shouts.
Her voice, it kept on failing.
She hit the reckless waves.
This put an end to her smooth sailing.

Her eyes forever shut by God.
Can't even see her hand.
She tries to keep on swimming,
But she just can't get to land.

The water cold and numbing,
Slowing her even more.
In the middle of the ocean,
It's a never-ending war.

Her feet just kept on kicking.
But they had not long to last.
The water's getting violent.
It's taking control fast.

One last time the waves engulf her.
She takes last breaths of air.
And although she keeps on trying,
The water doesn't seem to care.

Her instinct's telling her to breathe.
Her mind is telling her to wait.
But she can't hold her breath much more.
Her instinct's winning the debate.

She opens her mouth and tries to inhale.
But only salt water comes in.
It crushes her lungs with a harsh bleeding pain.
But she keeps on trying to win.

The water overcame her,
But she was not yet dead.
She was still alive to witness,
The horrid pain that quickly spread.

Another 2 minutes of torture.
Had passed in what seemed like a year.
She witnessed her own body dying.
Like a bystander frozen with fear.

In suffocating misery,
This young girl drowned.
And searches didn't help her.
Cause she was never found.

Again quiet got the ocean.
So calm, silent and still.
Another soul it waited,
To come and test their will.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Paiger

    Terifying insite, very dramatic, I don't understand the part about how she can't see? why would she not be able to see anymore? was she never able to see? it just pops out to me because its the only part that doesn't seem to fit, Otherwise its a really well writen poem :) Great Job

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    To me I didn't think it should go into the nature category even though it has a nature effect over it, just seems to of been better placed somewhere else. Not that, that matters!. Overall a gorgeous poem. Truely stunning and an enjoyable read. Keep up the good work.~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    This ones awesome hun. it flowed perfectly.
    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalee

    That was an EXCELLENT poem. i couldnt take my eyes off the screan. IT WAS WONDERFUL. there was nothing wrong with it. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow. this poem was superb! the ending was amazing, i felt as though it was me who was the next victim. you did a wonderful job on making me feel like i was there. 5/5