Comments : Always yours

  • 18 years ago

    by blueknight

    Wow this wow was great also like the other and just i see line that break the flow a little
    And guide with your loving soul

    and some other poets didnt like repititions but then this is great

    Geneross

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Excellent write..really cute..lol..most of my latest love poems are like this......u r very talented....very sweet write!
    Good job!
    Another 5/5
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Adorable poem : ) i think every girl wants this so i think we can relate ! 5/5 <33

  • 16 years ago

    by Connie

    You wrote a beautiful poem from the heart - I really enoyed reading this one.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lesslovedthanloathed

    More vocabulary would make it sound better.
    In that first bit, hold me tight is repeated, I think you should keep it contsant, like...
    "Love me dearly, 1
    Hold my tight, 2 HERE :D
    please tell everything will be all right, 3
    Hold me tight, 1
    Through the night, 2 SHOULD BE HERE
    Promise to me your internal love, 3
    Tell me you'll here in the night, 1
    Hold me tight, 2 HERE..Again
    Hold me tenderly, 3
    Never letting go,"

    "Promise to me your internal love,"
    I swear thats meant to say eternal.
    "You make my heart sore,"
    Soar?
    "And lessoned my load,"
    Lessened?
    'You lessened my pain,"
    You spelt it right here.
    Overall it was kind of lacking, the opening and ending aren't as strong as they should be.
    3/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollymariee

    The format for this one is kind of different .. Since it goes from rhyming to not ... But the ideas and wording are really good . There's alot of repetition of "tight" in the beginning .. Maybe try to change that up . Good job though , 5/5