Don't let them get you down. I like the repetition in the poem, almost like a song. Good job.

It was really good but it was sad too. I liked it.

A not'so'bad poem. i feel it could be worked on.

naught- a good word. but its too 'meaty' to use twice in a short poem like this.

the flow- i think the flow could use some work as well. some lines were wayyy to long. and needed breaks., while others were too short. i recommend you reread this poem. and adjust such things.

keep Writing.

x3 Lauren

Hm I liked the message in this poem except a bunch of the word choices threw me off and made it very difficult to follow through wiht the rest of the poem.. use simpler words and more metahpores and I think that your poetry would be a lot better. nice idea though.

Sorry, but this poem didn't really flow.. it didnt sound good to me.. I know you have the potential to fix that.. I could tell by reading you other poems.. you have talent.. but I just didnt see any emotions though.. nice try ..

But I was able to see the message.. though.. good job and keep up the work

It is not fare,
Fare =fair
The last word any ways=anyways

Other than that this was really good well written, great flow, nice show of emtion truly am excellent read. 5/5

Fair, Very confusing, and I have no idea what you were talking about.

Apart from changes and suggestions given ^
There isn't much left to say, I like the determination in this and the strength too,
Poem wise I thought it flowed okay and you did a good job
xxxxx