This is an interesting one. This is a story that is true about someone out there. Nice job!

Dead is a really strong word to me.
I don't think I liked it when you used it.
I just wanted you to know that.
It's not going to affect my vote or anything :]
Like I said: Raw beauty.
Your grammer is really off in this one, though
For example:
I [[got]] to move on
Making sure I [[got]] what I need
You mean have, correct?
All in all.
It was okay.
Not one of your best, though.
4/5?