I really liked it. Keep up the good work :)

5/5
(that is my rating)

5/5
(that is my rating)

One the few people I could trust

Put 'of' between 'one' and 'the'

I didnt really like this poem because it doesnt sound like a poem. It sounds more like you're having an AIM chat or as though you're talking to the persons face. I know its free verse but it doesnt have the poetic touch to it.

Well in the first stanza the EE sound got kind of annoying but then it got better as the poem went on so nice work!

Damn harsh, love is a illness and sometimes it gets better but sometimes it dont. I hope everything is ok.

xxx alex xxx

It was a bit cliche
You should redo it
and like describe how you felt instead
but it was okay

This was a great poem. I like the idea behind it, but the flow was a little jumbled and there were a few typos. Keep up the good work. *4/5*

Alyson

I thought that it was very good. There was some repition in the words, but I think that made it good, and made it stand out a bit, 5/5

To be honest.. and not to be harsh or anything.. but I was kinda bored reading this.. it really didn't catch my eye if you know what I mean.. but then again.. maye it wasn't my type of poem but I did read it .. I thought it flowed.. but it felt empty..... well nice try and good job though.. 4/5 then again.. srry for being harsh.. I warned I give true and honest comments...

Okay, this was cliche -- and it just didn`t work .

You you told me that you loved me,
that you would never hurt me,
and promised you would always be here,
I can't believe I thought you loved me
` The "ee" sound gets annoying after a while . You kept ending sentences with "me" throughout the poem . Along with the phrase "you loved me." It got kind of old and just ruined it .

It just wasn`t great . I can see what you`r saying, and it`s straight out, which I like, but the poem was just ... empty .
..__MiNDYY

You expressed all that you felt except the emtion, it was a little bare, the word choice was simple but not as effective as it could be, the flow was a little off, But I liked what you were trying to say, the first staza has one too many yous in it, you should delete one, and the 4th stanza with out should be one word without. Other than that you did a good job 4/5

I do like it, but i do agree with the other comments. the poem does lack some poetic devices, however it is still very good.

Um i love free style poetry but i am more into the rhyming ones , they give more intention and reflect more stability to the poem

but anyway the expression was good ,
and it seem from profound feelings

if you dont know yet , love hurt , but in most case we dotn care !!
and yes what hurt the msot is to love somone that dont love you back !
never leave is a fantasy !! unless some realistic things are made from both of you !!

i think you should know that !!

5/5

This was good, the flow wasn okay and the structure being free style was okay too, I thought this was a little cliche but otherwise was good.
Love
Tara