That was a fast pace poem, flowed really well.and I think the ending can be more powerful...
Nah its better the way it is.
5/5

Excellent Poem! 5/5 you deserve no less. The rhyming you did fit in very good, the story was awesome, and the flow was amazing. My favorite stanza is:

my heart beats faster
blood pumping through my veins
you whisper to me
this is a temporary pain

Again awesome poem, I think you should actually put this in the catorgory of "Dark Poems"
5/5

Wow, i love your choice of words! The ending is exceptionally powerful!!!

This is a great poem, but you should put it in the 'Dark Poems' catagory, I think that would be more fitting.

Also, I thought the end could be a little bit more powerful, I like it the way it is, but I think that it would have more of an impact if it were something more elusive, which would cause the reader to have to think about what you mean and interpret your words.

Great poem, 5/5 from me! :)

Your first verse came off VERY strong and that really got me pumped. The body of the poem kept strong, and the ending was great. Overall this was a great poem. You really created such a descriptive image. The emotions were mixed, which explains it being under misc. So good stuff!

Crimson is now my favorite word
i loved this poem its nice and dark just the way i like it

Nice poem i enjoyed it

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