The Storm

by Letty   Sep 28, 2006


Thick gray pillows of clouds roll
across the sky, as booming claps
of thunder roar with manly pride.

Showers of silver rain drops
descend upon the earth.
The wind arrives, in a
fashionable time and
tries to do its worst.

The leaves upon the trees
shivers from the cold.
Lightning strikes and lights
the sky a beautiful shade
of gold.

The sun peaks out
from behind a
cloud to share with
earth its warmth.

It then waves goodbye to
the passing tide and
that's what ends the storm.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    WOW THIS WAS EXCELLENT 555,,very good wording ryhmning,imagery and flow hope this vote brings the 4.9-5.0

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Just so you know, since you did win im giving you very indepth critique- but dont think that i hate your poems and they are horrid! lol. i just konw you are a great writer so i want to hepl you to you highest potential.
    ~*
    i like the syncopated rhythm of this poem its very cool but you should watch it a little, in a few spots it breaks up the main ideas and is a little choppy.
    *some of the language is slightly-i dont know- young.
    ~Ex of both those things^
    Lightning strikes and *lights* maybe illuminates?*
    the sky a beautiful shade
    of gold.
    and i think it could be-
    Lightning strikes and illuminates the sky
    a beautiful shade of gold.

    *Lastly the ending is a little dorky- thats what? it should be changed, and 'thats what' shoudl be removed.

    but a great poem., better than alot.

    5/5

    x.x:Lauren

  • 18 years ago

    by -Ѕнэ đιεđ ѕсѓεάміηĝ-

    Hey well done! i done really like this kind of poem, as i said before, i but im not going to vote you down, just because of my taste.
    i like the way you written this poem, it rhymes well, the nly thing i would suggest is to capitialise all the I's in words like In and It's. i don't get bothered by that, but some people do.
    Anyways, well done def 5/5
    Love Mel

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow, I love your nature poems.. The imagery is so beautiful and really draws the reader in.. The flow worked pretty well and the descriptions were nice.. Nicely done, keep it up! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Stumbling Shaman

    Hm, interesting impression of a storm. My only question is what does the storm think of itself? If I had any criticism, it would be to use more metaphors in your descriptions. But then again, looking at my own ungodly scrawl, I'm not one to talk. Good little poem.

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