Passionate Kiss

by Aken Sol   Sep 28, 2006


She glistens under the lamp's light
in a parking lot paved gray.
As the crushed Autumn leaves pass her by,
her lips were wet with words left not to say.

Slowly she takes a step foward;
my heart stops and skips a beat.
My vision is seen through Love's red dye
the moment before lips and lips would meet.

Quivering anticipation,
she shares her passionate kiss.
And no matter how hard I would try,
I could never have braced myself for this.

As she breaks away from her kiss,
I stood numbly in cover.
Unaware I couldn't bear to cry
while she rests in the arms of another.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lance Hardy

    Rawr

  • 18 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    Make the syllable count more uniform or rhythmic to get a better flow

  • 18 years ago

    by hikarikitti

    Hey anh
    you're getting better.

    =]

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ»Lσιѕ«ღ

    Great write, best poem i have read in awhile! I like how it has the twist of sadness at the end!! I also like the phrases you use like "seen through Love's red dye," her lips were wet with words left not to say." You did an amazing job!!!! Flow and rhyme were perfect!!! Loved it!!! 5/5!

  • 18 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Whoa! what i switch! I totally didn't see that coming. ha, if nothing else, that alone made it a poem to stand out from the thousands of love poems on this site. there were, however, other good things ; ) I liked the phrase "seen through Love's red dye," in particular.

    thanks for your comment on my poem, as well - i really appreciate it

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