Odd poem that does have some rythm and i liked the meaning though.

I love the structure because it's so different from the ones i normally read
Very emotive, you did a great job
5/5
*Gem*
(Thankyou for the lovely comment x)

It's deep. i like it.

Good poem. thanks for commenting mine :D

Hey good poem, but i would try to leave the text language out of a poetry website, thats all, but im not going to vote you downvote you just for that. Great poem, keep it up.
Love Mel

Nice poem. 5/5,
thanx for the comment.

I really like how you layed this out.Well-written and lots of emotion!Great job!