'tis a very nice poem, an enjoyable read, esp the first stanza, but i have one minor critisism here, it mayb just a minor mistake but yeh,

'I feel the redness singe my face
As our passions mingle.'

The secong line here seems, ends to abruptly, im not sure if its just me, but thatz wat i feel, anywayz, cheers,

5/5

'Whitey