Wow, a poem filled with original ryhming, and meaning. If there is one thing I would change is the grammer spelling and neatness. It's better if you present your work with pride. Anyway it's still a 5 for me.

Thankyou for your comment on my poem hun- and how can you say your work's not all that?? your stuff is very well written and can really feel the meaning in your words. love this one. keep it up xx