Time will tell

Over all a nice poem but while reading there awere many things i thought needed work-

* you need to add breaks in the stanzas, at the end of each line and commas to the breaks/pauses in each line. ex- The evil in all will be exposed, for the kind and caring to see. (or whereever the pause is. im not sure exactly where it is)

* Check the sentence structure. a few lines were confusing and gard to understand because of grammatical errors and problems with sentence stucture. i think you should go through and read the poem over slowly reading each line seperatly.(sp?).

* also in the last stanza patients-patience. and the second line needs work, irs a run on sentence..

Overall Good, not great poem.

4/5

x.x:Lauren

This is a great poem. Loved the way it flowed. 5/5

Wow! great poem! i dont know what to say. SO powerful, your really getting a valuable message through here. My favourite stanza it the 2cd. i love the way you have this sort of revenge, on those who lie and decieve in this poem.
5/5
Love Mel

Wow, this was good.. It was very meaningful and the idea worked well.. Your descriptions were good as was the flow and emotion.. Nicely done! 5/5

They say, might makes right. No no. Right makes might, it just takes a little longer.... This poem reminds me of a quote that goes something like that. again, well written, and another 5/5.