Another great one, but i think you should change the lines in first stanza,
first line, you should stop in unfold and get to second line.
just an idea...lol.
but it is a great poem once again, i can not wait to read more of your greatly writen poems. 5/5 as always

Sure time will heal a broken heart.
In gods time perhaps...
I can relate very much with this poem.
These words youve written are so true, I know it comes from youre heart.

God Bless!

Hehe.. I wish it was like this.. unfortunately it'll be a long time before everyone gets justice. But, none the less, a well written poem. 5/5

I liked this.

Brief yet strong poem. You may want to check your spelling and grammar

Such a beautiful and true poem. There is nothing I hate more than the people that take advantage of the innocent, but the worst part is that in this day and age you're left with little choices... you take advantage or are taken advantage of (this is of course a generalization and there is a lot of goodness in the world but still WAY too much bad to be completely content.). So I really enjoyed reading your poem because it reminds us there are lot more things more important than advancing in the world (especially at someone else's expense.) Thank you for posting this, I really enjoyed reading it.

Arsalan D.

They say, might makes right. No no. Right makes might, it just takes a little longer.... This poem reminds me of a quote that goes something like that. again, well written, and another 5/5.

Wow, this was good.. It was very meaningful and the idea worked well.. Your descriptions were good as was the flow and emotion.. Nicely done! 5/5

Wow! great poem! i dont know what to say. SO powerful, your really getting a valuable message through here. My favourite stanza it the 2cd. i love the way you have this sort of revenge, on those who lie and decieve in this poem.
5/5
Love Mel

This is a great poem. Loved the way it flowed. 5/5

Over all a nice poem but while reading there awere many things i thought needed work-

* you need to add breaks in the stanzas, at the end of each line and commas to the breaks/pauses in each line. ex- The evil in all will be exposed, for the kind and caring to see. (or whereever the pause is. im not sure exactly where it is)

* Check the sentence structure. a few lines were confusing and gard to understand because of grammatical errors and problems with sentence stucture. i think you should go through and read the poem over slowly reading each line seperatly.(sp?).

* also in the last stanza patients-patience. and the second line needs work, irs a run on sentence..

Overall Good, not great poem.

4/5

x.x:Lauren