WOWW!!! this is so ace!!! i really really like it and couldnt believe it was gonna be so great for such a short poem - well done hun
Ginnie x

Great job. enjoyed it! Jpoet*

I just wrote a poem yesterday with the same rhyme in each stanza and I hated it... I really forced it out.

You've done a great job at making this rhyme scheme work.

There are only a couple things I might consider changing just to make the flow a bit smoother...

Line 7 - take off the "the"
Line 10 - Change "deep" to "deeply"

Great work!