This is really good

Really dark poem, but well written.. I think you're a great writer.. keep it up!

Really dark poem, but well written.. I think you're a great writer.. keep it up!

....woow... i have absolutely no words for this.... its just... wooow..... im floored.

Deep.. very brutal and dark.. but very nicely written. 5/5

This poem was amazing. It was so creepy and scary (same thing? probably.) & That note that the guy left gave me the creeps! It definitely added a nice dark effect to this poem. You did a great job on this! 5/5

Great story line
"The man looked around with an expression of being haughty." that line was really awkward. there were a few rhymes that sounded forced, but it was still a really good poem. the last stanza was my favorite.

shadow dancer

Wow, so sickly awesome. I really liked how it flowed,perfectly. wicked awesome!!!!

XxbleedingangelxX

BTW shadow dancer has no Friggin idea what she is talking about It did not sound forced or akward!

I'm in awe. Another superb poem. Only part that didn't seem to flow to well whe i was reading it was
[The stars scream out of the darkening tale,
When the Young boy started to yell.]
The second line didn't seem long enough for the flow to be constant. But it was a great poem and I loved it. =]

Wow, creepy dark story. It makes me kinda angry because there are people out there like that guy. keep it up

*Bump up rating lol*

Very good.

WOW this is an amazing poem, the killer who is depicted is so creepy and you show it so well. The flow and rhyming is great too! definatly 5/5.

That scared the hell out of me. **Locks door**...Lol. 5/5 Loved it.