Well, this definately seems more of a short story than a poem, and although I wasn't expecting it and usually can't be bothered to read them, your description was amusing, if not impressive and I had to read on. I really enjoyed it, and I can tell from this one write, that you are a talented writer. I've never been one so great at description, for often times I get distracted by emotion, or dialogue if I am writing a short story. So I am envious of your capabilities, and hope to see much more from you. Wonderful job.