This poem is good nice work shanik

This is different to what i'm used to reading from you i think. I really like it though. The idea behind it was clever, and it's written well. I like the last stanza especially. Keep up the good work hun. =] 5/5

Hey. I know it's been a while since I've read and commented on your writes, but I've come back to check up on some new ones and see how you're growing in the writing area; and once again, I've noticed you've improved lots. The beginning stanza was my favourite, and I'm guessing it was probably the one you wrote first (I know that seems like a silly question, but I find that sometimes my best beginnings become a middle or even are used as an ending as I add on to it.) So anyway, I'm glad to see that you're still keeping up with writing, and not only that but getting so much better. I'm gonna be learnin' about writing from you more and more everyday I think :P. So nice job. Sad, but catchy, and as much as you know that I'm against the cutting (because it really doesn't help in the long run) it was kind of cool the way you put original words to it... Keep up the good work!