What can I say? Another amazing poem.

Oh wow. This was absolutely amazing. Your flow was flawess, rhymes were great. You also had a really deep meaningful meaning behind it, which made it even better. I loved the last two lines, too. They were the perfect way to end the piece. Great job! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Awh, once again, it was very metaphorical.. The flow was good as were all your descriptions.. I like the message that you put across and the way you worded it.. Nicely done 5/5

Astounding job. As usual, your rhymes, metaphors, and words fitted together like a puzzle. Great job. I hope to learn a lot from your poems.

If you have time, please r/r/c Snake tongues on pillars

Damn!!! =] that's all i gotta say

WOAH..... when i thought they couldnt get any better they did! your poems are amazing! you are a truley amazing poet!

~Murder.

Another god poem 5/5

I mean another good poem

Let me start by saying: 5, and you're going on my favorites. Expect to get a few more comments in the near future.

Next: Two suggestions. One is simple; I think the "chose" in the last line of the first stanza should instead be "chosen." I might be wrong. The next is a little different:
"Silent serenity seems to never linger, or last.
Easy does it, no need to take your steps too fast."
These lines don't conform to the syllable count in the same stanza, though they do match each other fairly well. The way I see it, you have two options. Separate them into a different stanza (not suggested) or shorten them, like this:
Silent serenity seems never to last;
there's no need to take your steps too fast."

Keep in mind that all my suggestions are just that: suggestions. You don't have to change anything.

In any case, I've forgotten what I was going to say next. Excellent job here, maybe the best of the three of your poems I've read so far.

Truly inspirational.. Loved it