Nicely written, has a good rhytm :)
easy to visualize what you wrote :)
well done
keep it up :)
(i just think that it's dying instead of dieing)

Jenna loves it, as she does all of your work! And nice to see you bac on the sight dearest paper. I missed you lol. 5/5 =]]

-Jenna.

Simply beautiful, lovely penned with beautiful emotions, so natural yet well rhytm....

Lovely poem. emotional and very flowing, it has a nice rhythm as well. thank you for submitting it into my contest!!
although sad i really enjoyed reading it. and as far as i can tel lit has no flaws./ =]

x.x:Lauren(5/5)