Raise the Blind

Karma Hope,

Nice, This is more of a poem than the other on you gave me.

Nice job and a very suggesting, pulling and relative Title. Well ti seems you are a better writer of what you have been thorugh and experienced. The first four lines are the best lines of teh poem.

In the below line
"Two friends that was fooled when you tried to bluff a lust,"

"was" should be "were".

In the below lines
"I know lust is blind and you didnt see $hit,
You did a Stevie, went all in with out seeing the odds"
use of slangs ruined the seriousness of teh poem. Please try to do without slangs, there was such a nic eflow before these two lines.

"But no matter how high the stakes, remember you have two "

I cannot make out why you did end the above line at those particular words or why you made ti so long. "have two" could have been in the next line itself, but still the above line is the add man out in the poem.

"I'll have a poker face, while high rolling making the bets."

The ending line is good but it could have been phrased better. I Would prefer the line to read

"I'll have a poker face, while rolling high; making the bets."

Very powerful, completely amazing i loved it cuz it reminds me of my own personal life. great job!

Excellent job. It was very creative of you to infuse card games with real life. Keep it up

Another good one 5/5

I agree for misstress well actually this is great coz this is origanal from u5/5