Your vision start starts to fail,

^^I wasn't too sure with this line. Were you meant to have "start starts"?

Anywho, This was a pretty good poems. It's different to most poems about girls and eating disorders. & That's what makes it great. The idea behind "drop dead ; gorgeous" was awesome! I loved that. Really good job in my opinion, keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Wow, this one is my favorite, so far, babeh. This one is so true & amazing. I love it so much. But as always, ilym.
Ilysm.x
Love,
Heater

A very powerful message, achieved through simple rhyme and language. Very well done, the play on the phrase "Drop Dead Gorgeous" is fantastic.

A very powerful message, achieved through simple rhyme and language. Very well done, the play on the phrase "Drop Dead Gorgeous" is fantastic.

Ohhh. I like this poem. Yet it's true. I thought the flow and style was amazing. It was nicely written.

"Your need to lose more flesh,
Skip another meal darling,
This one will cause your death.

It's time to drop dead ; Gorgeous. "

I loved this part, it had alot of feel to it.

Now, I will be honest on all my comments. I did not like the topic...and the way you wrote it just is not the best I have seen.
BUT...
I LOVED the ending more than anything...Such a beautiful ending should have a beatiful poem before it...
And even though the flow was perfect...I feel you could use more describing words.
In conclusion: I really loved the ending, that is what made the poem for me... And you wrote the overall poem well, I just like giving suggestions. =] Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

A very powerful message..keep up with the writting..please comment and rate my poems...thanks ~DARK~

This poem is so true...my friend turned anorexic...its so sad
well written and lots of emotion
5/5
Luv fallenxFromxGrace

Very well written and so true about todays society:D 5/5 lovely flow managed to keep it all through the poem

Wow.