by IdTakeABulletForYou Oct 3, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
She tried to warn her teachers, |
by Sea2Summit
Brace piece. I love the line 'she didn't know which one to pick or even which were true'. It shows the confusion caused by abuse in a child that adversely shapes them. Good job calling that out and telling her story, keeping her legacy alive to help prevent other children from suffering in similar situations. |
This piece is so vivid and shocking that it sent cold shivers down my neck. It's a subject that people don't want to talk about because it's easier to pretend it doesn't happen. A sentiment very well captured here. Well done on putting it out there in a way that is honest and dramatic as real life is. It's something that should be dealt with severely before it's too late. Milly x |
by mossgirl19
This broke my heart completely...this is a cruel world. Fathers abusing and killing daughters...it makes me so hopeless. You have told the tale so clearly in rhyme. |
by Marshall Lee
Woah... |
WOW... Okay this made me cry a little. but its only because I felt like I was there with this girl. Through all the pain and silent suffering. Then the ending. Brilliant! |
I think the one mistake in this poem was giving away that she was going to die well before she actually did. There definitely is some polishing that could be used on this poem, but it is a tragic tale. The main fault of this case was the school, calling the parent before talking to the student. Thankfully these days any case is well-researched, but poor Lonely Girl was so dejected that even teacher's didn't believe her. |